Stranded (100WCGU #30)

Time for another 100 word challenge! Yay! This weeks prompt was: “it wasn’t my fault”

It never crossed my mind that something had gone horribly wrong until my fiancé dumped my body unceremoniously in the Black Hills of South Dakota. I suppose the correct term would be EX-fiance. I lay flat on my face. The gritty dirt left me feeling like I’d been licking a cast iron pot. A strange whistling sound faded in and out- a rock had lodged in my left nostril. I couldn’t remember what I’d done, but I was sure it wasn’t my fault. It’d be a hundred years before I’d be discovered. I wondered what they’d classify me as… homo sapien idioticus crossed my mind.

*Check out the other entries! And my kids will be participating in this one too (eventually).

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19 responses to “Stranded (100WCGU #30)

  1. That’s one of the most compelling first lines I’ve read in a long time. I defy anybody to read that and not want to read on to see what happens next.

  2. buddhafulkat

    I agree with Sally-Janye. What a gripping opener! This is incredibly well written – great job!

  3. Sally-Jayne & Buddhafulkat – thank you very much 🙂

  4. an amazing opening line! A hook of the highest order. So can we expect more? I hope so!

    • I’d like to think so 🙂 We shall see – I have a few writing projects on my plate, but I like the idea of this and want to delve into at some point 😀

  5. Grimly funny. I was smiling despite the horrific scenario.

  6. Thank you, IsobelandCat – I’m glad I gave you a chuckle 😀

  7. A great story.
    I agree with Sally-Jayne, that opening sentence was tremendous. A real hook, drawing you in to want to read more.
    It was a grim tale but had an air of humour about it, especially the whistling sound from the rock stuck up the nose.
    Thanks for a great read.

  8. This reads like the beginning of a book – assuming she doesn’t actually die, of course. I love the underlying humor, it’s subtle but there, giving hope that she will somehow get herself out of this mess. It really makes me want to read on.

  9. That sounds like the great start of a much longer piece. I want to go on reading. You have established a character so well in just 100 words. Great job!

  10. This is great. I love the self-deprecating voice of this character.

  11. Jonesingafter40

    Wowza. You painted quite a picture with your 100 words! Very compelling. Loved it.

  12. I’m curious about why this person thinks they’ll include idioticus in his or her name. There’s a lot of mystery in here.

  13. Agree with the other comments- the opening line is fab 🙂 This story certainly has legs…

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