Time for another 100 word challenge! Yay! This weeks prompt was: “it wasn’t my fault”
It never crossed my mind that something had gone horribly wrong until my fiancé dumped my body unceremoniously in the Black Hills of South Dakota. I suppose the correct term would be EX-fiance. I lay flat on my face. The gritty dirt left me feeling like I’d been licking a cast iron pot. A strange whistling sound faded in and out- a rock had lodged in my left nostril. I couldn’t remember what I’d done, but I was sure it wasn’t my fault. It’d be a hundred years before I’d be discovered. I wondered what they’d classify me as… homo sapien idioticus crossed my mind.
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19 responses to “Stranded (100WCGU #30)”
That’s one of the most compelling first lines I’ve read in a long time. I defy anybody to read that and not want to read on to see what happens next.
I agree with Sally-Janye. What a gripping opener! This is incredibly well written – great job!
Sally-Jayne & Buddhafulkat – thank you very much 🙂
an amazing opening line! A hook of the highest order. So can we expect more? I hope so!
I’d like to think so 🙂 We shall see – I have a few writing projects on my plate, but I like the idea of this and want to delve into at some point 😀
Grimly funny. I was smiling despite the horrific scenario.
Thank you, IsobelandCat – I’m glad I gave you a chuckle 😀
A great story.
I agree with Sally-Jayne, that opening sentence was tremendous. A real hook, drawing you in to want to read more.
It was a grim tale but had an air of humour about it, especially the whistling sound from the rock stuck up the nose.
Thanks for a great read.
Thanks, Mike 🙂
This reads like the beginning of a book – assuming she doesn’t actually die, of course. I love the underlying humor, it’s subtle but there, giving hope that she will somehow get herself out of this mess. It really makes me want to read on.
I think it will be the beginning of a book – it’s got me intrigued 😉 definitely not dead yet ;-D Thanks!
That sounds like the great start of a much longer piece. I want to go on reading. You have established a character so well in just 100 words. Great job!
This is great. I love the self-deprecating voice of this character.
Thank you, Lisa!
Wowza. You painted quite a picture with your 100 words! Very compelling. Loved it.
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it 😀
I’m curious about why this person thinks they’ll include idioticus in his or her name. There’s a lot of mystery in here.
Agree with the other comments- the opening line is fab 🙂 This story certainly has legs…